WRiTE CLUB 2012 - A Champion Crowned
All of my judges came back with their votes, and the 2012 WRiTE CLUB Champion, by the smallest of margins, is.......
The voting ended up like this:
Jill Marsal Snivvy Crank
Sarah LaPolla Snivvy Crank
Ann Collette Raven Claw
Elana Johnson Raven Claw
S.R. johnanes Snivvy Crank
Rachel Gardner Snivvy Crank
Tiana Smith Snivvy Crank
Lucienne Diver Snivvy Crank
Lauren Ruth Raven Claw
ME Johnson Raven Claw
Here are some of the comments the panel offered about Raven Claw:
In Raven Claw, I was intrigued by the way I was kept off balance--have the creatures made a terrible mistake in assuming the form of a cat or have then been incredibly clever doing that? One would have to read on to find the answer to that and so that writing sample had a narrative thread, the other didn't. - Ann Collette
Raven Claw had a nice twist at the end - it really made me interested in knowing what happened next. Unfortunately, it wasn't until the end that I really became invested. I think the reason why the description felt so heavy at the beginning is because there were a lot of words that aren't used all too often that the reader had to interpret. - Tiana Smith
The second piece felt too overwritten to me. Long sentences, complicated words when an everyday word will do, too many adjectives, etc. It was hard to get into the story because I found the writing distracting. - Sarah LaPolla
With “Raven Claw” I worry from a marketing perspective that it’s too light. It’s a fun concept, and the author does a very good job right up front with the undulating cilia and six eyes that we’re dealing with an alien species. However, it doesn’t seem like it’ll be a very serious piece, and the sf market (actually, that of most genres currently) definitely favors the darker, more suspenseful cutting edge works. (Also, I had a minor issue with the overseer’s tail being described as a “shaft”…”hardened” and then swaying. Potential double entendre aside, the visual of something that’s hardened doesn’t go along with something that sways, at least in my mind.). - Lucienne Diver
Raven's Claw has a more developed plot, the story flow is good, and its playful nature puts a chuckle with a smile at the end - ME Johnson.
And here some of the remarks regarding our winner's - Snivvy Cranks piece:
I thought the suspense was terrific and the use of foreshadowing masterful. - Rachelle Gardner
It wasn't clear why the protagonist had to pay the price he did. It was a clever and self-contained piece, but I didn't understand what the protagonist had done to deserve to die. - Ann Collette.
Even though there were magical elements, I felt like I could understand the world right away. I'm also very curious as to why anyone would want to kill a mere janitor... I'm not as enthralled with the ending of the piece as I am with Raven Claw's. It's hard to answer the questions that are left if you kill of the character we've been following. - Tiana Smith.
I’d tell the writer to watch out for overusing dialect in the dialogue. The narrator’s voice is easy to follow and distinct in its own right. However, when Mr. Jaspers spoke, it was quite jarring in a way that didn’t feel authentic, so much as it took me out of the story. - Sarah LaPolla.
It was difficult to judge. It would have helped to know whether this was a prologue or whether this is the voice that would be used throughout the novel. It’s less problematic to have the omniscient voice if it’s a prologue (which I assume this is rather than limited third person because the reader is told about the truck’s thoughts yet Mr. Jaspers seems unaware of them). I didn’t really understand whether this was a world in which trucks are sentient, whether it was only this particular truck or why we were being told what the truck thinks unless the answer to these questions is important. I also wasn’t sure whether the accent would continue throughout the book, because this can be tiring for readers to follow. However, of the two pieces (both of which, again, were well done), Snivvy Crank is the one that had me most intrigued to continue reading. - Lucienne Diver.
I want to congratulate both writers, but especially Snivvy Crank for a hard fought victory.
So...just who are these talented writers? Well Raven Claw is none other than Chris Fries! And our champion, Snivvy Crank, is the talented Mark Hough!
Mark will now join Tiana Smith (2011 Champion) in the very exclusive club of WRiTE CLUB champs, as well as becoming a judge for next years finals.
Thank you once again to everyone who made WRiTE CLUB such a success this year! WRiTE CLUB Skirmishes -- a chance for those not selected to get their chance in the ring -- will kick off next Wednesday, but for now...the ring is dark. :)